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[poemVILLAGE]

my fifth and final property (red box alert) 25.07.16

　

i no some will be envious

and will be boiling like water on a stove

living on pond square was not luxurious

now 2 on highgate hill and one on south a one on the grove.

everyday i reminisce

try to filter and detox

living opposite where it started is no bliss

my addiction started with that red dam box.

yes i am accumulating

huge is my highgate portfolio

it happened by chance and not calculating

i admit i got a smug look like michael portillo.

twice a week i patrol

all 5 property's are included

is my highgate addiction a loss of control

please agree with me that i am deluded.

thank you to the reader

me you do employ

if you like pain and want to be a bleeder

then twice a week my poems are for you to enjoy.

[General Maximus]

very good dude, I am not a creative person at all and really struggle to do things like this. I love poems that rhyme and how cleverly they are worded to tell a story.

[poemVILLAGE]

Originally Posted by General Maximus

very good dude, I am not a creative person at all and really struggle to do things like this. I love poems that rhyme and how cleverly they are worded to tell a story.

thank you general maximus
for me you are first not to be caning
I am going to hold onto you like a octopus
because everyone else is sick of me poem draining.


thanks mate

[Ignitionnet]

Interesting audience you've chosen for this,
On a forum where, perhaps, such arts are remiss.
I wish you well in all that you do
May your cadence always be clear and ring true.

[Jimmy-J]

This one is called The German Guns

BOOM BOOM BOOM BOOM
BOOM BOOM BOOM...
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BOOM! BOOM! BOOM! BOOM!
BOOM! BOOM! BOOM!


Baldrick

[Kursk]

Originally Posted by Jimmy-J

This one is called The German Guns

BOOM BOOM BOOM BOOM
BOOM BOOM BOOM...
...
....
BOOM! BOOM! BOOM! BOOM!
BOOM! BOOM! BOOM!


Baldrick

Oh beautifully conceived and written Baldrick!

However, I think it lacks content (to reveal the true intensity of battle), progression (to shown the relentlessness of conflict) and conclusion (to underline the hopelessness of war).

I have tried to encapsulate all of these things in the re-write below incorporating rhyme for flow and colour to represent the blood of the fallen.

BOOM!
BOOM! BOOM! BOOM!
BOOM! BOOM! DOOM
ZOOM BOOM! DOOM
BOOM! DOOM
DOOM

I think Keats would love it .

[heero_yuy]

There was a young lady from Exeter,
And all the young men wanted sex with her,
Just to be rude,
She lay in the nude,
Whilst her parrot, a pervert, took pecks at her.

Magic Christian. 6M 51 sec

[poemVILLAGE]

you lot are fantastic - we are going to have a right laugh on here. thank you.

[dilli-theclaw]

I look forward to hearing more of your stuff.

[TheDaddy]

Originally Posted by Jimmy-J

This one is called The German Guns

BOOM BOOM BOOM BOOM
BOOM BOOM BOOM...
...
....
BOOM! BOOM! BOOM! BOOM!
BOOM! BOOM! BOOM!


Baldrick

Great writer, he once wrote a novel to that started badly, tailed of in the middle and the less said about the end the better.

There once was a sausage called baldrick

The end

[RichardCoulter]

Originally Posted by heero_yuy

There was a young lady from Exeter,
And all the young men wanted sex with her,
Just to be rude,
She lay in the nude,
Whilst her parrot, a pervert, took pecks at her.

Magic Christian. 6M 51 sec

There was an old woman from Ealing,
Who had a peculiar feeling,
So she layed on her back,
opened her crack,
and peed all over the ceiling

[heero_yuy]

Originally Posted by RichardCoulter

There was an old woman from Ealing,
Who had a peculiar feeling,
So she layed on her back,
opened her crack,
and peed all over the ceiling

I'll raise your old woman and play:

There was a man of bad breeding,
who got on a bus from Ealing,
A sign on the door,
Said don't spit on the floor,
So instead he spat on the ceiling.

[richard s]

On a public convenience wall

Its no good you standing
on the toilet seat
the crabs in here can
jump six feet.